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beauty is something i can't understand
only present in grit
in lucid thoughts belonging to
a girl
who can't
believe
in angels
who can't
believe
in - [must not speak, must not think]
beauty:
cynics drowning in half-full moons
love is murder
and
murder is kind
slaughter the wishes the hopes the
d r e a m s
fly to the moon and never come back
it's not worth to crack the glass
when the pieces will only
shatter
your
mind
don't sing and don't dance and don't
take. a. chance.
because risk is for them and you
are only f-o-r-e-v-e-r you
spell it out without thinking twice
thoughts may only be used just once
so: use: them: carefully:
i look in the mirror and no one looks back
there's beauty in empty in ugly in beauty
in you
there's life and there's death and it's all
in
you
if you believe you can fly you will fall
if you believe you can hold you will break
if you believe you can love you will lust
if you believe you can lust you will love
and - if you believe in believing...
[do not lie]
they say shoot for the moon, you may
land among the stars
but there is s o . m u c h . e m p t y
to
f
a
l
l
only present in grit
in lucid thoughts belonging to
a girl
who can't
believe
in angels
who can't
believe
in - [must not speak, must not think]
beauty:
cynics drowning in half-full moons
love is murder
and
murder is kind
slaughter the wishes the hopes the
d r e a m s
fly to the moon and never come back
it's not worth to crack the glass
when the pieces will only
shatter
your
mind
don't sing and don't dance and don't
take. a. chance.
because risk is for them and you
are only f-o-r-e-v-e-r you
spell it out without thinking twice
thoughts may only be used just once
so: use: them: carefully:
i look in the mirror and no one looks back
there's beauty in empty in ugly in beauty
in you
there's life and there's death and it's all
in
you
if you believe you can fly you will fall
if you believe you can hold you will break
if you believe you can love you will lust
if you believe you can lust you will love
and - if you believe in believing...
[do not lie]
they say shoot for the moon, you may
land among the stars
but there is s o . m u c h . e m p t y
to
f
a
l
l
Heh, it's been a while since I've uploaded work. Anyway, I hope you guys all like it! I've been experimenting with poetry and trying to make my writing deeper.
© 2010 - 2024 icy-moon-shadow
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This is a very beautiful poem. The delicate words you used create a feeling of hopelessness and sadness, and by making the poem feel a little like a song, it makes it even more beautiful.
I especially like the second-to-last verse. The repetition of "If you believe you can" drills the message of the poem into our heads, and intensifies the feeling of hopelessness.
I think you could improve this if you left out some of the fancy spacing. It isn't so bad at the end, but I think there's too much of it at the beginning.
Overall, a beautiful piece.
I especially like the second-to-last verse. The repetition of "If you believe you can" drills the message of the poem into our heads, and intensifies the feeling of hopelessness.
I think you could improve this if you left out some of the fancy spacing. It isn't so bad at the end, but I think there's too much of it at the beginning.
Overall, a beautiful piece.